Fight Scene, Draft 1
PAGE EIGHT
1. Two thirds height, one third width, top left.
Wide shot, from street level up toward the roof of a several story apartment building. A figure is running across the roof. It is NIGHTWATCH.
CAPTION: 09/31 7:21:07 posted by T. R. O’Neil (2 posts total)
2. Same size panel, immediately to the right of panel 1.
Wide shot from below in an alley looking straight up. NIGHTWATCH leaps between two buildings.
CAPTION: I put the costume on last night.
3. Same size panel, top right.
Medium shot. NIGHTWATCH is crouched on the ledge of a building, his hands apart; one leg crouched under him the other extended out. He is looking down into an alley.
CAPTION: I told myself I wouldn’t. It didn’t take.
4. One third height, full width, wide shot.
We see an alley from above, below several men are advancing on YOUNG WOMAN from page 1. She clutches her purse. Some men carry weapons, some simply advance menacingly.
(OP): Don’t worry ‘bout’cho purse bitch! We don’t wan’cha money!
CAPTION: There are at least four of them. I’m not a paranormal, I don’t have any powers. I’m just a man in a Hallowe’en costume.
PAGE NINE
1. Full height, one third width, wide shot.
From below, NIGHTWATCH vaults himself over the edge of the building one handed like a gymnast over a bar.
CAPTION: This is my God-damned town--
2. Half height, one third width, medium shot.
NIGHTWATCH lands with two feet on the back of THUG 1’s neck. He crumples. THUG 2 and 4 are out of frame. THUG 3 has his back to the situation.
CAPTION: --And I don’t need any damn powers.
3. Half height, one third width, medium shot, to the right of frame 2.
NIGHTWATCH ducks a bullet fired by THUG 3 and moves toward him. THUG 1 is still down.
4. Half height, one third width, close shot, below frame 2.
NIGHTWATCH grabs THUG 3’s arm and breaks it swiftly, causing THUG 3 to drop his weapon.
CAPTION: I make it a rule not to kill.
5. Half height, one third width, wide shot.
We see THUG 2 between NIGHTWATCH grappling with THUG 3 and YOUNG WOMAN at the end of the alley. THUG 2 has shot at NIGHTWATCH but because of the angle it hits THUG 3.
CAPTION: Doesn’t mean no one dies. Guns mean that’s par for the course.
PAGE TEN
1. Small frame inside frame 2, close shot.
NIGHTWATCH’s hand grabs waste bin lid.
2. Quarter page, upper left, wide shot (medium on TED, wide on alley).
TED is in foreground and has dropped THUG 3. He throws the lid hitting THUG 2 who stumbles back and drops the gun. We assume he is about to loose consciousness.
3. Top right quarter page.
TED turns to look at the looming shadow behind him.
CAPTION: I made a rookie mistake. I assumed the last guy ran.
4. THUG 4 uppercuts TED with a baseball bat. TED is flung toward the end of the alley. The hit connected with his upper torso below his neck however, saving him from unconsciousness.
CAPTION: He was powered, low level, probably a mutie or a gen mod.
CAPTION: Big, but no strength modifications; a guy that size with strength mods should have killed me outright with one hit.
CAPTION: Probably defensive, skin looks pretty thick.
PAGE ELEVEN (TOP PANEL,FIVE LONG PANELS, BOTTOM PANEL)
1. TED begins to get up out of a pile of refuse and the unconscious THUG 2.
CAPTION: I’ve got to take him down hard. Punish him.
2. TED and THUG 4 clash. TED has picked up a brick and is preparing to strike THUG 3’s weapon arm.
CAPTION: If I don’t some other powered is going to convince him he needs to wear a cape.
3. Look of pain on THUG 4’s face. TED takes bat.
4. Bat breaking over THUG 4’s face.
CAPTION: I remind him that bigger does not mean better.
5. The two separate, THUG 4 staggers back.
6. TED kicks up into THUG 4’s chin.
CAPTION: I remind him that people like me have been around, have experience with people like him.
7. TED is on top of THUG 4 beating on his face. The look in TED’s face is of pure madness. There is blood on his fists.
CAPTION: And when he’s down I make sure he stays down so that he has a long time to think about what happened tonight,--
CAPTION: --and a reminder every time he looks in the mirror that I’m not going to put up with this shit in my neighborhood.
PAGE TWELVE (THREE LONG HORIZONTAL PANELS)
1. Close shot on TED from the waste down standing over THUG 4.
CAPTION: I tell myself I’m not like him. What I’m doing is different, heroic.
2. TED is climbing up the fire escape back to the roof. He is using one arm and cradling the other. He sprained his wrist on THUG 4’s face. There is blood on his uniform.
CAPTION: He was breathing when I left the alley—
3. TED standing on the rooftop, holding his arm.
CAPTION: --but the ends never seem to justify the means. -Ted.
1. Two thirds height, one third width, top left.
Wide shot, from street level up toward the roof of a several story apartment building. A figure is running across the roof. It is NIGHTWATCH.
CAPTION: 09/31 7:21:07 posted by T. R. O’Neil (2 posts total)
2. Same size panel, immediately to the right of panel 1.
Wide shot from below in an alley looking straight up. NIGHTWATCH leaps between two buildings.
CAPTION: I put the costume on last night.
3. Same size panel, top right.
Medium shot. NIGHTWATCH is crouched on the ledge of a building, his hands apart; one leg crouched under him the other extended out. He is looking down into an alley.
CAPTION: I told myself I wouldn’t. It didn’t take.
4. One third height, full width, wide shot.
We see an alley from above, below several men are advancing on YOUNG WOMAN from page 1. She clutches her purse. Some men carry weapons, some simply advance menacingly.
(OP): Don’t worry ‘bout’cho purse bitch! We don’t wan’cha money!
CAPTION: There are at least four of them. I’m not a paranormal, I don’t have any powers. I’m just a man in a Hallowe’en costume.
PAGE NINE
1. Full height, one third width, wide shot.
From below, NIGHTWATCH vaults himself over the edge of the building one handed like a gymnast over a bar.
CAPTION: This is my God-damned town--
2. Half height, one third width, medium shot.
NIGHTWATCH lands with two feet on the back of THUG 1’s neck. He crumples. THUG 2 and 4 are out of frame. THUG 3 has his back to the situation.
CAPTION: --And I don’t need any damn powers.
3. Half height, one third width, medium shot, to the right of frame 2.
NIGHTWATCH ducks a bullet fired by THUG 3 and moves toward him. THUG 1 is still down.
4. Half height, one third width, close shot, below frame 2.
NIGHTWATCH grabs THUG 3’s arm and breaks it swiftly, causing THUG 3 to drop his weapon.
CAPTION: I make it a rule not to kill.
5. Half height, one third width, wide shot.
We see THUG 2 between NIGHTWATCH grappling with THUG 3 and YOUNG WOMAN at the end of the alley. THUG 2 has shot at NIGHTWATCH but because of the angle it hits THUG 3.
CAPTION: Doesn’t mean no one dies. Guns mean that’s par for the course.
PAGE TEN
1. Small frame inside frame 2, close shot.
NIGHTWATCH’s hand grabs waste bin lid.
2. Quarter page, upper left, wide shot (medium on TED, wide on alley).
TED is in foreground and has dropped THUG 3. He throws the lid hitting THUG 2 who stumbles back and drops the gun. We assume he is about to loose consciousness.
3. Top right quarter page.
TED turns to look at the looming shadow behind him.
CAPTION: I made a rookie mistake. I assumed the last guy ran.
4. THUG 4 uppercuts TED with a baseball bat. TED is flung toward the end of the alley. The hit connected with his upper torso below his neck however, saving him from unconsciousness.
CAPTION: He was powered, low level, probably a mutie or a gen mod.
CAPTION: Big, but no strength modifications; a guy that size with strength mods should have killed me outright with one hit.
CAPTION: Probably defensive, skin looks pretty thick.
PAGE ELEVEN (TOP PANEL,FIVE LONG PANELS, BOTTOM PANEL)
1. TED begins to get up out of a pile of refuse and the unconscious THUG 2.
CAPTION: I’ve got to take him down hard. Punish him.
2. TED and THUG 4 clash. TED has picked up a brick and is preparing to strike THUG 3’s weapon arm.
CAPTION: If I don’t some other powered is going to convince him he needs to wear a cape.
3. Look of pain on THUG 4’s face. TED takes bat.
4. Bat breaking over THUG 4’s face.
CAPTION: I remind him that bigger does not mean better.
5. The two separate, THUG 4 staggers back.
6. TED kicks up into THUG 4’s chin.
CAPTION: I remind him that people like me have been around, have experience with people like him.
7. TED is on top of THUG 4 beating on his face. The look in TED’s face is of pure madness. There is blood on his fists.
CAPTION: And when he’s down I make sure he stays down so that he has a long time to think about what happened tonight,--
CAPTION: --and a reminder every time he looks in the mirror that I’m not going to put up with this shit in my neighborhood.
PAGE TWELVE (THREE LONG HORIZONTAL PANELS)
1. Close shot on TED from the waste down standing over THUG 4.
CAPTION: I tell myself I’m not like him. What I’m doing is different, heroic.
2. TED is climbing up the fire escape back to the roof. He is using one arm and cradling the other. He sprained his wrist on THUG 4’s face. There is blood on his uniform.
CAPTION: He was breathing when I left the alley—
3. TED standing on the rooftop, holding his arm.
CAPTION: --but the ends never seem to justify the means. -Ted.
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